- I put back two words that I'd taken out last time
- I reordered the last two stanzas in a poem--moving away from finality
- I took the stand alone poem away from the beginning of the book (before Part I) and put it into the midst of Part III
- Part IV (last part) didn't seem lumpy as it had on last read-though
- I fixed the page numbers and the Tof C
- I updated the acknowledgments page
I also worked on the third part of a poem (which will actually come first), zoning in on the last two lines of it, questioning the language which turned out to be a big plus. From my notes on this: "I don’t like the contradiction of lay/moved. Maybe I shouldn’t say 'Lay' although it’s a nice rep. What did we do if not lay? cringe? yearn? sat? paused. But I guess part of the problem is that the beach = the world. We tarried (only if I was from another century!)." Problem solved I think. It wasn't just the contradiction of those two words but also their relative colorlessness.